300 Days of Better Writing

March 29, 2010

Use Intro Phrase to Focus on Main Idea


The most important information in the sentence should be placed at the end of the sentence. (See Day 5 for more about this.) However, some information requires additional explanation, which you may choose to place in the sentence, as opposed to providing it in the next sentence. This can create weak sentences. Consider this sentence.

“The concept of evolution is a scientifically supported theory, though many people disagree with the theory.”

If the most important point here is that evolution is supported by science, then this information should be at the end of the sentence where it has the most impact. Currently, it is at the beginning, followed by explanation.

We use this tip to move the explanation to the beginning of the sentence and place the most important information at the end. This gives us the following revision.

“Though many people disagree with the theory of evolution, it is a scientifically supported theory.”

(This is the tip for day 131 in 300 Days of Better Writing.)

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